FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~Prey Or Other~

Posted: June 12, 2013 in dark, fiction, writing
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I am travelling and do not have easy or reliable access and cannot follow my regular format. However, this prompt did it’s job so I am huddled beneath some shade, sipping beer from a plastic cup, and writing on my cell phone, hoping to attach all this inside the hotel business office at some point.

A thought from last eve…ever wonder why hundreds of zombies only shuffle after those fleeing teens? Have you ever seen the fireworks in Disney then tried to leave quickly?

Here’s this weeks contribution:

Prey Or Other

The piano man stroked keys favoring ebony at this St. Augustine bar. Women shimmered in candle light, writhing a smokey coital grind. In a nook round an island of mounded glassware with a smoldering center, Cleveland engaged the traveler. He wore a tight collar fronted in white. Serpentining rosary were choked by restless fingers.

The two held palaver.

It’s not I who needs saving, friend.”

The drink is a demon’s bite, as a vampire steals life in sips.”

If it’s your mission to save my soul, good sir, speak plainly. But first, play us a Godly hymn.”

jKb

 



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Comments
  1. H. Ken Abell says:

    I absolutely love your voice. Week in and week out, your prose never fails to impress. That last line is a true gem.

  2. That is beautiful and eerie. I love the vampire stealing life in sips. So evocative.

  3. Penny L Howe says:

    Your words gorgeous! Your story, intriguing. A fascinating piece that I greatly enjoyed reading.

  4. Linda Vernon says:

    Oh boy. Quite nice. I love your wonderful description and that last line was the cherry on top. 😀

  5. zookyworld says:

    Your vivid, imaginative descriptions set up the scene very well. With each of your stories, I admire your choice of words that resonate… for example: “Serpentining rosary were choked by restless fingers.” Damn good writing here.

  6. Bonus points for the use of the word palaver. Such an underused word. Loved this one, darling.

  7. […] Bradley Chronicles’ words always give me a chill – this week’s did not […]

  8. Joe Owens says:

    I have to agree with the request to speak plainly. The more complicated the description the more likely I am to get lost.

  9. As good as your story is, I got a chuckle out of the zombie question. Hope you’re enjoying your sun and beer.

    janet

  10. kingsleycw13 says:

    Loving the intensity between the lines here… Nicely done!

  11. Carrie says:

    I had to read it twice to really set the scene in my mind. Makes me think of Heart of Darkness for some reason…the missionary venturing into the unknown

  12. troy P. says:

    This was so, well I suppose “full” would be the word to fit best – wonderfully done!

  13. unspywriter says:

    This is quite the world presented here in so little space. Wonderful turns of phrase.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/simon-sez/

  14. Dear JK,

    Deliciously dark. You painted a picture with eloquence and style. BTW, I favor the ebony keys myself. 😉 Hope you’re enjoying your respite… and I’m grateful for your dedication to the point of posting from your cell phone.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  15. Sarah Ann says:

    Love the description (smokey coital grind) and mystical, dark feel to this. There is so much more going on than your words reveal.

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