Thank you again to MadisonWoods for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction Friday postings at:
http://madison-woods.com/index-of-stories/grapevines/
For those who are new, MadisonWoods shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers will compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Welcome to the grande illusion!
Here’s my contribution:
What You Wish For
Nestled among grapevines upon this rise far from prying eyes he unrolls her blanket, pours her wine, arranges cheeses and spreads, fans out crackers, meticulous, each detail. He queries if she appreciates the privacy of his secret place, if she is happy and in love as he. Sipping, inhaling, savoring, seduced by sliding sun.
She lays, quiet.
Curious. “Isn’t this exactly what you sought with him?” He indulges in another tender morsel.
Fragrances of freshly turned earth. Nearby, a cool, shallow hollow.
She shivers. Silently welling, a tear spills.
He kisses her taped mouth.
Receding sun welcomes coming romance.
jKb
The Bradley Chronicles 
Beautiful twist you’ve got there. In the beginning I started to think you’d gone soft.
Thanks, Adam. Haven’t gone soft yet, I just hope I can keep up the pace I’ve set.
This one’s a chiller. So much from just “her taped mouth”. Bravo!
mine’s here: http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/07/bittersweet.html
Thanks, Rochelle. I wonder if that bit was too much for some folks here…
Something tells me this is not going to be such a sweet romance! Very creepy. Very well done.
http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/07/19/through-the-grapevine-ff-200712/
It was a perfectly blissful romance. Thanks.
Blissful and sweet have a different, less mutually agreeable flavour.
It was a blissfully satisfying story, but I’m also looking forward to the longer version.
thumpy. the thump is effective
I’m glad you enjoyed. Thanks.
Wonderfully creepy. Good job!
Thanks, Jan.
Ahh knew there would be a fatal twist in the end! Poor girl, though at least he layed on a decent last supper.
But she can’t eat with a taped mouth!!
Thanks, Emma.
Nicely creepy with a great twist. (Nice blog theme–hmm, do you think I might have the same one?) 🙂
Thank you much. And regarding blog themes…great minds?
Definitely!! 🙂
So twisted–I love it!
Thanks, Fay. Glad you enjoyed.
ohh chilling…nice twist!
Thank you, Raina.
gruesome… Randy
Thanks for coming by and reading, Randy.
Ew, Ew and EW! Great story I just don’t want to meet this guy. Nice job.
I’m certain he’s a good looking, well groomed citizen, with a bit of a ‘mommy’ issue.
I have to admit you do ‘thriller’ really well and this could be the beginning of a fabulous longer story that explains the back story too. 🙂
http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/07/20/friday-fictioneers-the-grapevine/
Thanks, Linda. That’s a very good idea, would make for a nice short story I think. I shall give that some thought.
Well if you do decide to do I shall enjoy reading it JK 🙂
A great emphatic twist on this! Nicely done.
Thank you, Sandra.
Thaaaaaat was horrible awful and awesome. If I might make a suggestion, I would switch the last two lines so that that “taped mouth” comes as a slap to the face at the very end. 🙂 I was a little too shell shocked to read the last line my first time around.
Thanks, Kaitlin. That line was certainly the one with punch.
This has an almost poetic quality to it, and I’m particularly fond of stories that you think are one thing, then abruptly become another. I agree the impact, which is already powerful, would be enhanced by switching the last two lines. Amazed at all the emotions you captured here. Great job.
Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/asylum/
Thanks. There certainly is more to this story. The real terror comes after the kiss.
Oh, wow. Goosebumps, seriously! I had a bit of foreboding with this one, but surely didn’t expect the twist. Very spooky and well done! Here’s mine: http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/07/19/friday-fictioneers-july-20-2012/
Glad you enjoyed, Thanks!
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“He kisses her taped mouth”…oh yeah! You wicked, wicked man…nice way to lead us on. Very nice indeed.
~Susan (www.susanwenzel.com)
PS – and damn if you don’t look like a young Gary Busey in your profile picture!
Thank you, Susan. I’m glad you enjoyed the wickedness. And I’ve been told that before about Gary Busey. My friends say it makes me look like a spooky stalker, which I think actually enhances my role as a thrill writer, so I’ve elected to keep it. Thanks again!
Well, that didn’t turn out how I expected! Nice twist, terrifying as it is….
Mine is here: http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/07/19/flash-friday-fiction-12/
Thanks, Erin. I didn’t want to disappoint anyone.
oh it was so lovely.. and then the taped mouth, very nice twist
Very good, menacing and too scary for me!
Thanks, Gilly. All in good fun.
Very chilling. Certainly a twist. I appreciate this line: Sipping, inhaling, savoring, seduced by sliding sun. Your use of words, I think, is phenomenal.
I invite you to mine at: http://haiku365.wordpress.com
Thank you, Kris!
You give Stephen King a run for his money! Great story! Bone chillingly eerie at the line referencing “her taped mouth.”
I’m glad you enjoyed this, Ilyan. And thanks for the very nice complement.
Dear JK,
Arrived at your story and don’t want to leave. Sharp as a well honed blade, your story slices deep with few words and conveys even less hope. Wicked good.
Aloha,
Doug
Thanks a bunch, Doug. As Linda recommended, perhaps I’ll make this into a fuller short story to enhance the vineyard experience.
WOah! Jeesh. I started going “how romantic…” and then bam…!
Great story Mister!
Thanks for popping over the other day to read 🙂 I did a post on the prompt this week. Would love your comment 🙂 http://niftitalks.com/2012/07/20/she-heard-it-through-the-grapevine/
Thank you, Nifti. I’ll be over to your posting soon, it’s been a long weekend.
A sad tale set in beauty and full of darkness.
A lovely setting for a picnic.
Wonderfully dark, and I will admit I didn’t expect it to be going where it was going until the taped mouth.
Thanks for stopping by my place this weekend!! http://frommywriteside.wordpress.com/2012/07/19/the-hunted/
oh dear. oh dear dear. he’s got issues.
Yup. She had her roll too, but he is certainly strung a little differently.
Dear JK,
There’s something to be said for a woman who know how to keep her tongue. At least he can get a word in edge-wise. I suspected foul play was afoot when I read the line, “freshly turned earth.” I can see this fitting well into a longer story. Nicely done.
So twisted- I love it
beautiful
Creepy good…well done as always. Thanks so much for stopping by mine.
I never have to search for dark and creepy – I just wait til your posts pop up in my inbox. Always a delight – even if terrifying 🙂