FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~The Tranquil Garden~

Posted: May 29, 2015 in Uncategorized
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Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction postings at:

https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2015/05/06/8-may-2015/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, relax in the Tranquil Garden.

Here’s my contribution:

The Tranquil Garden

“I wish you were dead.”

The words hung in the air like the cigarette smoke Tad would belch out, stretching wider with each passing second. Mary choked on her tears.

I’m strong, damnit. Why do I get weak around him?

“Then do something about it. Come on, be a man for once in your life.” Tad clenched his fist.

“Go ahead, do it! Hit me!”

He relaxed his hand. “You’re not worth it.”

“Coward.” She shoved him as hard as she could. “Fucking coward! Hit me!” She shoved him again, spilling his beer.

In the end she got her wish.

jKb

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Comments
  1. Yikes! Be careful what you ask for. Not such a tranquil garden after all.

  2. Dave says:

    I’m having a difficult time deciding which of this couple is the least likeable. It’s a tie at “nil”.

  3. helenmidgley says:

    I didn’t like the content, but I loved how you wrote it, making me not like it, if you get what I mean. Great piece of writing 🙂

  4. Rare and brave. I liked how you engage this kind of topic. A well-written piece! Thank you.

  5. Dear JK,

    My imagination is now running wild. I want to know what method she used to get her wish. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  6. gahlearner says:

    Eek. And I mean that in a good way. You describe that peek into a dysfunctional relationship so well. They both feed on each other’s weaknesses. Both are predators… or maybe scavengers? Great story.

  7. Some wishes should never be granted… disturbingly well written.

  8. Creatopath says:

    Great opening line.

  9. storydivamg says:

    I hope all this was just a “heat of the moment” conversation, but that last line has the ring of finality to it. Realistic dialogue.

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