FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~The Salesman~

Posted: May 6, 2015 in fiction, Outdoors
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Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction postings at:

https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2015/05/06/8-may-2015/

This prompt was from our MadisonWoods days. How far has this group come, anyway?

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, make a deal.

Here’s my contribution:

The Salesman

“It’s finished.”

“Will it work?”

“Just like I explained. After the pot’s done bubbling just drain it into this here metal bucket, then start the fire.”

“And the hose for the colder.”

“It’s called the ‘chiller’.”

“And what comes out will be pure shine?”

“Virgin pure.”

“Can’t thank you enough.”

“Sure you can.”

“How much do I owe ya?”

“I don’t want your money. I’ve got money.”

“Then what?”

“Payment due in full. Upon delivery.”

“Yes, I remember.”

“Your daughter. Or, your wife. You choose.”

jKb

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Comments
  1. Dear JK,

    Nice to see you back. The dialogue tells a chilling story. That’s quite a price to pay for shine.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  2. I made him an offer he couldn’t refuse.

  3. micklively says:

    That’s a man who’s desperate for a drink! Scary stuff.
    Good piece.

  4. Ouch.. some people are really desperate.. I guess the narrator wouldn’t sell his daughter cause she’s already pregnant with his child…

  5. ansumani says:

    The power of addiction. It’s not unheard of in poor countries ..drunk fathers selling their children. Nicely done story.

  6. That’s pretty dark stuff. The price some people will pay for making their own alcohol, although I guess it depends on what he values, ultimately.

  7. Horus says:

    pretty stiff cost.. wonder if its worth? O r may be he will sell it and get enough money to replace !

  8. What a price to pay! I wonder who he chose?

  9. Pretty strong stuff moonshine to pay your wife or daughter for it. Great dialogue.

  10. gahlearner says:

    He’ll pay with his eyesight, too, and more, if he doesn’t know how to separate the Methanol fraction. Great story, this Guy really is desperate for a drink.

  11. Hmmm, I suspect that there will be trouble in the not too distant future. Cheers.

  12. what was wrong with local liquor store?
    Enuf drinking though and I guess you lose both your wife and your daughter, so what does it matter anyway.

    Randy

  13. Who would pay such a price? This is one cold man.

  14. Margaret says:

    Yikes! He’s not a nice man. Good story, though.

  15. Danielle Karns says:

    Know which you chose

  16. Creatopath says:

    When I read about the guy saying, “your daughter or your wife,” I thought of Rumpelstiltskin!

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