FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~Take The Wheel~

Posted: September 17, 2014 in Uncategorized
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Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/09/17/19-september-2014/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, listen and realize, you’re not the only one.

Here’s my contribution:

Take The Wheel

Johnathan squeezed his eyes closed and stomped the accelerator to the floor.

Sometimes the path was full of love and hugs and everyone wanted your attention and sometimes the love was shards of glass and the hugs left you gasping for your last breath and sometimes you just wanted to be alone, to make the hurt stop, at all cost, God just make it stop.

His fingers balanced the wheel, then one by one they slid. Johnathan awaited Him to take the wheel.

The engine screamed as the cylinders reached red. The radio shrieked.

The windshield exploded.

Johnathan was released.

jKb

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Comments
  1. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear JK,

    Compelling, obdurate, inexorable…. We are along for the ride, willing, yet sensing the coming end, wanting to open the door and leave, yet unable…until your last sentence gives us what it gave Jonathan.

    I love reading good stories in Friday Fictioneers and yours are on the ‘go to’ list. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  2. JKBradley says:

    As ever, much appreciated my friend. I just hope the picture isn’t too dark for some to see the light.

    Peace.

  3. Sandra says:

    Grim reading but very good. The bit about the hugs was a cracker of a concept.

  4. You’re right, we were on the same track. Grim but descriptively well-written.

    janet

  5. Dear JK,

    I hate liking this but I can’t help myself. I felt the impact of your horribly stellar writing.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  6. then one by one they slid – This line tells the story. Everything sliding to finality. Grimly wonderful.

  7. I guess he got what he wanted. Wonderfully well written.

  8. ” and sometimes the love was shards of glass and the hugs left you gasping–” love this line, JK. Chilling and dynamic story, that pulled me in.

  9. Such a strong depiction of Jonathan’s pain, and then the release – well told 🙂

  10. So painful to read.. for Jonathan such an end might be the only way.

  11. Amy Reese says:

    The last line felt like a release, too! Nice job. Someday, we may just have to surrender.

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  13. Bradley, Well written view of deep depression from the inside. He was his own enemy and took a tragic final way out. Well done with tension that broke with impact at the end. —Susan

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