FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~ Not What You’re Thinking ~

Posted: May 14, 2014 in dark, fiction, writing
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sheep-and-car

Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/05/14/16-may-2014/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, the carnival of screams awaits.

Here’s my contribution:

Not What You’re Thinking

The heat was high, the day long, and the night would be even longer. Willy minded his control panel and his lazy eye gazed across the grounds as the gate opened. The flood of prospects spilled into his world.

He swallowed his welling saliva with savoring anticipation.

Willy hadn’t shaved, hadn’t even bathed in two days but he paid it no mind because here they came, these bewitchers, each manicured to perfection, so fresh and nubile. He felt that little tingle and his mind drifted to pleasures and lust and pain and screams.

Yes, tonight would be a good night.

 jKb

Two nights prior Nightshade’s Carnival of Screams had rolled into this very quaint Virginian town. With this carnival comes worse horrors than ‘ol Willy. He’s quite a docile soul when things are right. Mostly he takes tickets and smiles and operates the spinning cups. But like many, he is darker in some places, deeper place, secret places. I think you’re putting the pieces together. So, it’s not what you were thinking. It’s way, way worse.

 

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Comments
  1. That is some dark stuff. It’s bad when ol’ Willy is the tamest thing out there.

  2. That’s really scary. Really scary for the writing being so calm. It’s a story of anticipation, I can feel it building. Really well done.

  3. Dear JK,

    Your description of Willy is pungent. I agree with Claire on the pacing. You’ve made me feel the evil gently rolling in. Well done.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  4. A lovely balance of calm and terror. Nice job.

  5. JK, Very dark and great description. I could see the scene. I felt a definite sense of foreboding. Well done. 🙂 —Susan

  6. He is a pleasant fellow, isn’t he.

  7. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear JKBradley, you are scary! Good story and I could feel the tension mounting as the gate was opening. Really creepy – you are good at this horror stuff! Really Good. Nan 🙂

  8. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear JK,

    This is why you remain on my reading list. Good job.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  9. AH.. you go deep deep into that darkest place.. all kind of nightmares come to mind

  10. rheath40 says:

    Vivid. Brilliant. Astounding. As always.

    Love, Renee

  11. unspywriter says:

    Very scary on a totally visceral level. Well done–every words counts for much more. One of your best–though they’re all good.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/escape/

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