FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~The Set Back~

Posted: April 23, 2014 in dark, fiction, writing
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Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/04/23/25-april-2014/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, have a listen.

Here’s my contribution:

The Set Back

Marco ran his arpeggiation with learned alacrity, the tones so delicious that Gerald found he had ceased his accompaniment and was simply savoring the effect. With no hint of arthritic hindrance, Marco plucked away, eyes closed, head slightly canted, lilting along with a subtle curl to his lips.

It is true, music does soothe the savage, and in this fleeting moment Gerald was placated. Not a slip in nearly thirty evenings. But for all his strength Gerald’s will was weakening. And those lips curving, smug, pompous–was Marco laughing? The rhythm of Marco’s nodding head said yeeesssss.

Laughing.

At you!

jKb

 

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Comments
  1. Oh indeed.. the old man can pluck his guitar masterly… and to be sitting beside and trying to follow can never be easy…. (not to far from the truth I think…)

  2. Oooohh, something doesn’t bode well for Marco. Do I want to know?

    • JKBradley says:

      Indeed, Alicia, you want to know. Oh yes. It’s lovely and terrible all in the same moment, but it’s also artistry in it’s own right, and he is a master.

      Thank you for visiting!

  3. The thoughts going through Gerald’s mind sound like they’re getting violent. The thoughts of a man on the edge. Sounds like he’s had problems before. Good story. It’s an effective hook for a longer story. 🙂

  4. Your opening line is beautiful and the perfect set-up and contrast to where the story ends.

    janet

  5. […] FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~The Set Back~ […]

  6. I felt as if I was there watching.

  7. unspywriter says:

    Nice and dark–a good dark. Yes, it would be great to see where this goes.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/lift-every-voice/

  8. Nan Falkner says:

    Hey, I’m trying to leave a comment – but your site is shooing me away. I like your post, and had to get out a dictionary to read it. Very impressive! Thanks, Nan 🙂

  9. Nan Falkner says:

    By golly, it worked! Thanks, Nan 🙂

  10. wmqcolby says:

    A very good rendering. Worked well.

  11. Dee says:

    Well done, I felt as though I was there watching; great characterisation.
    Dee

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