FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~His Due~

Posted: March 12, 2014 in dark, fiction, Outdoors, writing
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Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/03/12/14-march-2014/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, it’s time to collect.

Here’s my contribution:

His Due

Brackish water swelled on the coming tide, choking the river basin, black as the moonless night, and full of dark terrors. Emory settled into his wooden chaise-longue at the dock termination, and closed his eyes. He breathed deeply the thick, humid night, tasted the salt and decay, and reveled in his remembrance of that long ago St. Augustine night. He recalled the clinging dress, the slow gyrations of her sinful hips, sweat beads like diamonds upon her neck and breasts, her full and hungry lips, and the jazz so sultry. He still owed that debt and how Ol’ Tick thirsted.

jKb

 These widgets have not been my friend. Just don’t seem to want to link up and work. Sorry.

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Comments
  1. I figured we’d be back to horror soon and I wasn’t disappointed. I could feel the hot, humid air, as oppressive as his memories. As for WordPress, there’s a whole other horror story. I couldn’t get the linky guy, but I did at least get a working link of words. Who knows?

    janet

  2. misskzebra says:

    Very sensual and well written. Good work.

  3. ‘…full of dark terrors…’ ‘…sinful hips…’ and ‘…sweat beads like diamonds…’ Exquisite descriptions in a dark and interesting
    piece! Drew me in from the beginning. Well done!

  4. Powerful choice of words to give a menacing mood to your story – I particularly love ‘sinful hips.’ Well done.

  5. “Brackish water swelled on the coming tide, choking the river basin,” That opening is gorgeous writing. There is dark sensuality to the entire piece. Really great!

  6. Interesting, tense, and so descriptive I could see the scene and practically taste the salt in the air. Very well written.

  7. Dear JK,

    Intense and vivid.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  8. Your story picked me up right from the beginning and held on to the end! 🙂

  9. I love how you paint a picture.. I could feel the sweat and then the memories .. so fitting …and of course a great end in darkness..

  10. slow gyrations of her sinful hips..my favorite line. Very sexy!

  11. Your prose is poetic as ever, darling. Am I correct in interpreting that he made a deal with the devil for this night of bliss? That line about how Ol’ Tick thirsted suggests it to me..

  12. Dee says:

    Great story JK, wonderful prose producing some great imagery. I could almost feel the hot, humid air, well done.
    Dee

  13. AnnIsikArts says:

    Atmospheric and suspenseful.

  14. storydivamg says:

    “Stolen apples taste the sweetest.” I love that St. Augustine Night came into this. Neatly wrapped story. I sense our hero may just feel that the night was worth it.

    Cheers!
    MG

  15. atrm61 says:

    Sensuously dangerous ;-)Loved it!

  16. Nan Falkner says:

    Great descriptions in this story! Love the writing. Thanks, Nan

  17. Dani Karns says:

    and I was waiting for the ‘gator

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