FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~Coffee and Cream~

Posted: February 26, 2014 in dark, fiction, writing
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FFF PROMPT hay-bales-sandra-c

Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/02/26/28-february-2014/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, taste the indulgence.

Here’s my contribution:

Coffee and Cream

How the village has changed, thought Ripley, as he peered between the drapes of his attic apartment. He rocked and reminisced and stroked the luxurious fur of Cheryl, his long-time companion. Ripley had done his life’s work here, he’d left his mark for certain. And if he hadn’t, surely Marcus, his protégé, would ensure the townsfolk would remember, would believe. It was nearing breakfast, Marcus was due to return and share the previous night’s haunts, the enchanting, the seduction turned to taunting, the welling fear, the terror of realization, stifled screams and penetrating thrusts, labored breaths, the sensuous final beat.

jKb

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Comments
  1. Men of many talents… 🙂 sounds like it’s a village to avoid.

  2. elmowrites says:

    I liked Cheryl, makes me wonder what exactly she is. That final line is full of fantastic images – my only suggestion would be that “share the … haunts” suggests Marcus is actually bringing something tangible back, whereas the rest of that line suggests he’s only bringing stories. I liked the idea of him returning with an offering for his master!

  3. helenmidgley says:

    I loved the rising speed, from seduction to screams. Great job 🙂

  4. Sandra says:

    Marcus sounds like a chip off the old block, as we say over here. Good job.

  5. Another excellent story with a terrible story line…and from such a lovely picture. The FF are quite a bunch. Very good as always, JK.

    janet

  6. Well-written story. There are a lot of possibilities of future tales to be shared with readers. I, for one, would like to read more.

  7. Dear JK,

    Sounds like a must to avoid. Well written as always.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  8. Well written, with a great sense of Ripley’s perspective from between the drapes of his attic apartment.

  9. Great story. Mr Google tells me these are established characters. More reading to do!

  10. Love the crescendo at the end — that last sentence practically screams.

  11. Hala J. says:

    I like a story that steps into a mind without much background, but you see, hear and smell and learn about what’s going on around them. This little bit had it in spades. The ending was creepy and twisted, and I’m a fan of creepy. Definitely not a village I’d want to go into after dark.

  12. Racy and stormy, loved the darkness and the sense of horror that strikes in the last line. Well done!

  13. storydivamg says:

    I never considered that a vampyr might have a pet cat. That made me grin.

    Cheers!
    MG

  14. shailajav says:

    Lots of good imagery there and a good deal of suspense too. Intend to elaborate further on this? Will be worth a read 😀

  15. Amy Reese says:

    Love the imagery here. Who knows what fantastical things go on in small villages. Nice work!

  16. rgayer55 says:

    Once again, you’ve left a lot to the imagination. It’s always enjoyable to read your work.

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