FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~The Toast~

Posted: February 12, 2014 in dark, fiction, Holiday, writing
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Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/02/12/14-february-2014/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, raise your glass.

Here’s my contribution:

The Toast

“Do you remember the sunset at that lovely winery, something Oak? It looked back across that ridgeline. The sky was like cotton candy.” Philemon swirled his Bordeaux, explored the sunlight through the goblet, inhaled the bouquet, sipped. “The wine was crap, but those views…breathtaking.”

Philemon rocked back and forth upon his patent leather loafers and chuffed his Romeo Y Julieta.

A gentle breeze swirled and tickled the nape of his neck. Philemon glowed, ever the gentleman, his glass raised. He unzipped his fly and let go his bladder upon the one black brick in the patio.

“Happy Valentine’s you bitch.”

jKb

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Comments
  1. znjavid says:

    Oh dear, is that all that is left of her?

  2. Jan Brown says:

    Well done. This is the week for our protagonists to do away with their spouses!

  3. Ah! Bitterness… a sad routine that comes by to visit us sometimes. Well-penned. I liked the character sketch in particular.
    -HA

  4. ‘Ouch’! But very well written 🙂

  5. Love the details — the Romeo & Juiet cigar, the black brick…. exquisitely done. Full of venom.

  6. Ah.. peing on her grave.. I must say he went length to take his revenge.

  7. Oh my I heard this done before. Mean, mean, mean!! Good story otherwise. 🙂

  8. Very well done. Black brick? Sounds like he killed, cremated and buried her with one of the oven bricks for a marker. Sounds a bit like a Poe story.

  9. Dear JK,

    I loved the description of Philemon enjoying the view through his wine glass. Not so sure I enjoyed the imagery at the end. Obviously the end of an unfortunate relationship. Well told story in any case.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  10. Philemon is uncouth too, to boost! But then his good riddance stinks! Powerfully written.

  11. Sarah Ann says:

    LOL. Sounds like Philemon is happy in his alone-ness. Beautiful descriptions throughout.

  12. Something went wrong there. Great little piece of unpleasantness. The antidote to St Valentine’s day. Well done.

  13. storydivamg says:

    I like it. Pleasant memories followed by a bitter aftertaste. One can read his resentment on so many levels. I think of him as a sort of grizzly bear with a tender heart.

  14. wmqcolby says:

    Hahahaha! YES! What a hoot. Here I thought you were going sentimental and you didn’t disappoint. Ah, sweet irony. Four orange peels.

  15. unspywriter says:

    Ha, ha! We were similar minds today, though yours is much more satisfying. 😉

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/sweets-to-the-sweet-farewell/

  16. hugmamma says:

    A dastardly deed…both!

  17. So much animosity left and she’s the dead one? Well, hope he empties his bladder next time in a jail somewhere. Good story though – he’s malevolent but, you’re very talented. Thanks, Nan

  18. Carrie says:

    who knew a glass of wine would bring such devastation to the characters! So much anger this week LOL

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