FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~What’s A Girl To Do?~

Posted: February 5, 2014 in dark, fiction, writing
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FFF Prompt Lamps

Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction Friday postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/02/05/7-february-2014/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, we need your eyes.

I resisted the urge to tell the story of Ms. Rebecca finding love at a yard sale while searching for an urn to house her late husband’s remains. Only because such a story would demand much more space.

Here’s my contribution:

What’s A Girl To Do?

 

During the last few weeks Miriam listened as Ms. Rebecca drifted in and out of lucidity. Miriam would clean or fold laundry or prepare meals as Ms. Rebecca regaled with suddenly vivid tales of great adventure, spelunking caves, crossing barren expanses within the belly of a dirigible, riding swells upon the high seas. At one point Ms. Rebecca grasped Miriam by the collar with incredibly strong hands, pulled her close upsetting the cat from her blanketed lap, and said, “The ship is sinking. Bring the ducats from inside the lamp. Then, save yourself!”

 

Miriam reached for the embroidered pillow.

jKb

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Comments
  1. Adam Ickes says:

    Has Miriam finally had enough of the old girl then? Or finally got the information she was waiting for maybe? I’m thinking it’s likely the latter.

  2. I sincerely hope Ms. Rebecca comes back to haunt Miriam. Rats!! I like Ms. Rebecca a lot. And now I want the story you couldn’t tell, too.

    janet

  3. Dear JK,

    Ms. Rebecca sounds like an interesting person. If I were Miriam I’d be sitting with notepad in hand or, at the very least, a recording device of some kind. Nice one.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

    • JKBradley says:

      I always try to listen to the stories of the interesting folks around me. I even will at times go into a bar, with my pen and notebook, and just write stuff down. And if it’s slow, I try to describe the patrons as if they are characters for a story.

      Thanks!

  4. znjavid says:

    Looks like Ms Rebecca had a very interesting life. Too bad it had to end this way.

  5. Sandra says:

    Enough said, I guess. Or perhaps Miriam was just going to use it to prop Ms Rebecca upright. Yeah right…

  6. Sounds like Ms. Rebecca had a good life to keep her company in her fog. good story.

  7. I would be listening to every detail… waiting to hear where the treasure is buried. Nice job, JK.

  8. DCTdesigns says:

    She must have gotten the information she needed if she is readying the pillow. Rebecca certainly had a life of adventure. I hope Miriam isn’t too hasty. There may be more to tell.

  9. Well done. I wish I could read the longer version. It would service Miriam right if Rebecca was just making it up out of her imagination.

  10. draliman says:

    So that’s where the ducats are hidden! Goodbye, Ms Rebecca.
    Good story!

  11. Sarah says:

    What an ending! Great story.

  12. tedstrutz says:

    I fear some broken lamps are on tap…

  13. K.Z. says:

    shocking ending.loved this. i hope that she wont find anything inside the lamp 🙂

  14. unspywriter says:

    Let the smashing of lamps begin! Killer (in more ways than one) last line.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/innocent-bystander/

  15. Hi J.K.,
    Very colorful and dramatic story, with a shocking ending, all done with great flair. Excellent writing. Ron

  16. Linda Vernon says:

    Yikes. Well enough is enough when it comes to taking care of Ms. Rebecca. I have a feeling there’s some deliciously rich history leading up to her current predicament.

  17. Ha.. our devious minds went similar ways this week…

    the mercyful smother…

  18. Bodhirose says:

    Miriam snapped…bye, bye Ms. Rebecca… Great story…full of detail and a cool, twisty end.

  19. Wow! That was a great ride. Thank you.

  20. Great writing! I especially love that last line. I would be holding on to a pillow, too.

  21. camgal says:

    Great story 🙂 especially the ending, wow.

  22. Poor Ms. Rebecca. Her last adventure is going to be quite a ride, and not very pleasant at that..

  23. I suppose she has just been hanging on until she found out where the ducats were hidden?

  24. Sarah Ann says:

    It sounds like Ms Rebecca had a full life. I hope those ducats are a long time spent and Miriam doesn’t benefit from her loss of patience/ patient.

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