FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~The Room With A View~

Posted: January 8, 2014 in dark, fiction, Outdoors, writing
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FFF prompt ROOM with a view

Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction Friday postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/01/08/10-january-2013/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, enjoy a night in The Room With A View.

Here’s my contribution:

The Room With A View

The warden simply said, “you’ve won the lottery, Nolley. Parole came through.”

Nolley peeled a faded photo from the wall, tucked it inside his breast pocket, then offered his bare wrists to receive the iron manacles beginning his out-processing. He was guided through several doors, down a long corridor, then out an external passage to a soggy, sandy expanse.

The surf churned hungrily.

Your room with a view.” Upon an obviously man-made boulder sat a single, barnacle-covered cell.

Haven’t noticed this from the yard.”

Yea, Can’t see it at high tide, and she’s a comin’ in.”

jKb

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Comments
  1. Sounds like he won’t be coming back alive. A creative twist to the story.

  2. Sandra says:

    Sounds like it might be a fairly brief parole period. Nice work.

  3. Dear JK,

    Parole? From what? Life? Well-written as always, sir. Put me a little in mind of Shawshank redemption.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  4. I liked how you started with the idea of release, building up a false sense of security. Excellent twist.

  5. kz says:

    i’d like to say at least it’s better than prison… but it’s not. i agree with helena’s comment 🙂

  6. Hi J.K.,
    That sounds even worse than solitary. And I thought waterboarding was bad. Different and creative take on the prompt. Ron

  7. sandraconner says:

    Macabre at its finest. Very well done.
    Interesting that I saw a prison environment as well when I looked at this picture, but in my story the guy really does go free.

  8. Joe Owens says:

    Obviously the warden has a sick sense of humor. His lottery and parole are short-lived.

  9. Gives a whole new, dark meaning to “irony.” Great job, JK.

    janet

  10. Oh JK, such a dark turn. This is very well written and compelling. I like the way you string the reader along, believing he Nolley will go free, and then the idea of high tide. Awful! In the 1800s, here on the west coast, they used to tie men to the pylons in the harbor, and let the tide come in. when I first read about it, the idea was haunting. This has the same effect.

  11. Linda Vernon says:

    Ohhhhh! Chillingly excellent!!!!!

  12. unspywriter says:

    Oh, you never fail to scare the sh.., uh, heck out of me. Good job!

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/sirens-song/

  13. Oh gosh, what a disappointment! and I loved that ruin, too – but wouldn’t want to be there in a storm…

  14. MissTiffany says:

    I’m betting he wasn’t expecting that…great twist! Very well written.

  15. I see our brains ended up in similar territory! Nice tension and flow!
    http://merlinspielen.com/2014/01/10/ff-house-arrest/

  16. That’s a unique way to end… Wonder what the Geneva convention has to say.

  17. How dreadful! It reminds me of Alcatraz.

  18. pattisj says:

    You led us down the garden path on this one–only to find the tomb of doom! Nicely done.

  19. It’s a whole new meaning to parole.

  20. Dani Karns says:

    And that’s why u check the view b4 checking in…… poor guy. Parole officer has an easy time ahead with this one On Jan 8, 2014 6:41 PM, “The Bradley Chronicles” wrote:

    > JKBradley posted: ” Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her > work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other > Flash Fiction Friday postings at: > http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/01/08/10-january-2013/ For > those who are n”

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