FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~Merry Hands~

Posted: December 26, 2013 in dark, fiction, Holiday, writing
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Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction Friday postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2013/12/26/27-december-2013/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, give us a merry hand.

This, a take inspired by Clive Barker’s The Body Politic.

Merry Hands

His body slumping from fatigue, hands bloodied and raw, Berwick managed another pull upon the life-boat oars and distanced himself from the horror which took his ship, his crew, and several of his closest friends.

Seven miles off the rocky New England coast and cruising smoothly beneath a waxing gibbous Berwick was bound for trade in Virginia when hell broke loose.

“It was in the hands,” said one. A loss of responsiveness at first, then no cognitive control, the hands lurched and reached and clawed and squeezed and rapidly all was lost.

Berwick, eyes downcast, beheld his own coming savagery.

jKb

 

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Comments
  1. His awareness of his own ‘coming savagery’ is a wonderfully powerful image. well done, liked it.

  2. Adam Ickes says:

    Such a great ending. Perhaps there will be more to this story once he makes landfall.

  3. OH how eerie to se the oncoming savagery..

  4. Dear JK,

    Ominous last line. Effective and powerful story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  5. Sandra says:

    Very sinister. Well told JK.

  6. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear JK,

    You can always be counted on for an excellent read. This week was no exception. That’s one vessel I do not want passage on.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  7. I like it. I haven’t read The Body Politic, but it reminds me of something by H.P. Lovecraft, especially the New England reference.

  8. rgayer55 says:

    Very riveting. The last line speaks volumes.

  9. unspywriter says:

    Killer last line–creepy and ominous both. Great imagery.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/le-secret-dun-pere/

  10. claudia says:

    this last line is just perfect and leaves the story wide, wide open… cool

  11. kz says:

    absolutely eerie. and you ended it with the perfect powerful last line. enjoyed this a lot.

  12. jwdwrites says:

    Very good. Full of powerful imagery and poetic turn of phrase. 🙂

  13. It’s a compliment when I say: You give me the willies! 😉 Not to be a lemming, but kick ass last line!

  14. Mike says:

    A great story. I loved the ending and all that was conjured up with those words, ‘Berwick, eyes downcast, beheld his own coming savagery.’

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