FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~Wasted Silence~

Posted: October 25, 2013 in fiction, writing
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FFF prompt dismantled-keyboard

Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction Friday postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2013/10/23/25-october-2013/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, listen to the sound of silence.

Here’s my contribution:

Wasted Silence

Sharon began suffering transient yet debilitating migraines just after her 38th birthday. The university physicians tested, then verified; the proliferating tumor was inoperable. These experts diagnosed her a death sentence.

Sharon wept.

In the following weeks the blinding lights and piercing throbs which tormented her evolved into sounds, at first discordant tones and dissonant melodies, then finally they blossomed into full, gorgeous symphonies. The cancer was killing Sharon, yet she embraced it, for never had she any musical talents.

Upon her deathbed Sharon wept anew. She considered this glorious music wasted on someone like her, someone who could not share.

jKb

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Comments
  1. What an amazing perspective, darling — auditory hallucinations as something to be enjoyed – as a respite for the pain and fear. Wonderful.

  2. For all its brevity, a very moving piece.

  3. What an usual way of using the prompt, although she really died twice, which is even more sad.

    janet

    • JKBradley says:

      I’m happy that came across. I was trying to create the loss, then something wonderful, which became something also very sad. It was a challenge to slice this down to 100 words.

      Thanks, Janet!

  4. I hear interesting things do occur with brain abnormalities with sound and senses. Really unique take!

  5. That was a gorgeous and heartbreaking story. Nevertheless I have to point out a typo – “yet she embrace it” – should be “yet she embraced it, for never”. Also I think you need a comma before and after that phrase to make it work. Otherwise, it is simply lovely.

    • JKBradley says:

      I played around with the verb tense within the piece a couple different ways, and missed that one. Thanks for the pick up. I also did segment that sentence with commas, I agree with you.

      Thanks!

  6. Dear JK,

    I had to wait a bit for my screen to clear to comment. Your story is heartbreaking for me on a very personal level.Beautifully imagined and rendered.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  7. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear JK,

    Third para, last sentence—’embraced’ instead of embrace. There. House cleaning done. On to the good stuff.

    This was such a good story. Full of the dark essence of laughable tragedy that pervades so much of life. One of the very best stories from the ‘broken keyboard’ prompt. Thank you for taking the time to compose such a masterful submission. I’m kind of floored by how good this is. Not a surprise coming from you, but that it is so seamless and solid in its conception and execution. Bravo and Encore, please.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    • JKBradley says:

      My phone just ate my response.

      Thanks for finding that correction. I was playing around with verb tense and missed changing that one.

      I’m pleased you enjoyed the story.

  8. What a creative use of the photo. I love the way the dismantled keyboard resonates with the illness.

  9. hugmamma says:

    beauty in the sadness…great.

  10. That last line really made the loss significant.

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