FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~The Inheritance~

Posted: September 25, 2013 in fiction, Heart Warming, writing
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Three Doors

Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction Friday postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2013/09/25/27-september-2013/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, the reading is about to begin.

Here’s my contribution:

The Inheritance

The suit drove to the clearing off Marshall, the place where grandfather’s house had stood for two centuries until it was consumed in a suspicious conflagration.

“Why are we here?” Micah’s annoyance simmered as they exited the Suburban.

“For the reading of the inheritance statement, of course.” The suit swayed heel to toe, his hands in his pockets, his lips peeled back exposing two perfect rows of bony nubs.

“There’s nothing here but an empty lot and bad memories.”

“Hold out your hand, Micah.” The suit pressed a skeleton key into Micah’s palm. Suddenly, three doors arose from the earth.

jKb

 

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Comments
  1. There seems to be so much going on in the background of this story. I guess the real adventure starts with the last sentence.

  2. brainsnorts says:

    and from there, the story begins. and it could go anywhere we want. love the “suit.” well done

  3. paulmclem says:

    …Nice set-up, look forward to part 2 of this 🙂

  4. Dani Karns says:

    intrigued – I want more!!

  5. a great lead in to an exciting adventure
    I hope you write the story to it some day

  6. draliman says:

    Ooh, I like this! What happens next?
    I love the phrase “suspicious conflagration”!

  7. Ah.. there is a choice to come.. I guess only one leads to richness and fame..

  8. Fun to sit with the magic and mystery… where did the doors come from, where do they go, what’s next? Nice work.

  9. Carrie says:

    dum dum duuuuuummmm. cue scary music and proceed to rub arms to dispel the sudden goosebumps! The beginning of something scary I think

  10. summerstommy2 says:

    great piece JK, loved the ending, like there should be part two, or at least a back story, got in me, well done.

  11. Steve Lakey says:

    Leave ’em wanting more! I think this works as a stand-alone, but there’s room for a follow-up.

  12. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear JK,

    I love the worlds you create at the drop of a hat or the turn of a skeleton key.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  13. Dear JK,

    All of a sudden I’m transported to the movie 2001 where the obelisk appeared. interesting take on the prompt.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  14. zookyworld says:

    Awesome sense of mystery with this. The first sentence bolstered the background and present — and then the last sentence sparked a whole lot of possibilities and adventure.

  15. Adam Ickes says:

    This sounds like the beginning of a wonderfully terrifying journey. Love it.

  16. rgayer55 says:

    I love the characters and language, especially “two perfect rows of bony nubs.” I hope you continue this. There’s lots of opportunity with this beginning.

  17. Joyce says:

    That could have a lot of interesting angles, all of them mysterious at this point with no clue as to how it would/could go, but as others said too, you could develop it into a larger one. I always did think you were a good stand in for Stephen King. We watched his ‘Under the Dome’ series, Very interesting twists, and all. Thanks JK for stopping by mine.

  18. I hope the bad memories don’t linger. Well written!

  19. Oooh, I loved the creepyness and the promise of something, I don’t know what, that this conveys. Good job.

  20. Kent Bonham says:

    Whoa. Creepy. Well-done, too, JK. Made me want to read more! I thought of the Crypt Keeper being the suit.

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