FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~Her Name Is Jane~

Posted: August 14, 2013 in dark, fiction
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Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction Friday postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2013/08/14/16-august-2013/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, let us hold hands and tell stories, and share in the wrath of a child.

Here’s my contribution:

Her Name Is Jane

A plastic bag twirled across the unusually quiet Main Street riding a hot and sticky summer gust.

She’s a prima ballerina, isn’t she?” asked the child dangling bare legs over the side of the courthouse steps. In another voice she began to make the nappy, stuffed zebra sitting beside her respond but her happy place was dissolving; the ballerina had become snagged on one of the proud trees which lined the street.

This interruption angered the child and she shrieked.

Stop it!”

The tree was plucked and flung and in the commotion the zebra toppled off the ledge.

Zigzag, No!”

jKb

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Comments
  1. Glad the power (in most children) is in their imagination
    well told

  2. This made me think of that old Twilight Zone episode where the kid has all the power — they spoofed it on a Simpsons Hallowe’en special I think.
    At first I thought that the girl’s use of the words “prima ballerina” might have been a bit out of place, but then, she’s no ordinary little girl, is she?

    • JKBradley says:

      No, far from ordinary. And maybe she’s not really a little girl. Perhaps she just chooses to be this way because it reminds her of happier times?

      Curious.

      Thank you so much, Helena!

  3. Carrie says:

    geez, don’t make her angry!! I’ll happily stick with my 5 yo’s tantrums, at least things stay still 😉

  4. Jan Brown says:

    Be afraid. Be very afraid.

  5. Wow, a unique take on the prompt. I saw the day through the eyes of a child and what is important to them. Well done.

  6. Sandra says:

    That really is a chilling take on the prompt. Very effective.

  7. neenslewy says:

    Wow – I hadn’t even noticed the plastic bag! So much story coverage in a short flash. Very cinematic.

  8. jwdwrites says:

    Wow, that was great. Terrific idea to use telekinesis and I loved the name Zigzag. Great post JK. 🙂

  9. rgayer55 says:

    I came here expecting to find a body and found something even more scary. This was a pleasure to read.

  10. Dear JK,

    “That’s a real good thing you done, Anthony. A real good thing.” In case you haven’t seen “The Good Life” episode of TZ here’s the intro to one of my all time favorite episodes. Perhaps Jane knows Anthony. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5AZtNokI8wE

    Good story that sent a hollow chill through me. There’s just something spookier than spooky about sweet looking kiddies being harbingers of evil.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • JKBradley says:

      That was a great episode.

      If there was room for words and you could zoom out, in my mind, this town was decimated, shattered glass, billowing smoke, distant blaring alarms…certainly not Pleasantville.

      Thanks!

  11. unspywriter says:

    Well, a little child not to piss off. Nice and eerie.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/socratic-method/

  12. In the words of Perry Block, “WHAT THE FUCK!!!????” This was even out there for me!

  13. Dee says:

    I found this tale quite disturbing, well done. There is always something eerily creepy about a sweet-ooking child having unearthly powers

    Dee

  14. Imagination is so powerful! Great tale.

  15. A kid like that sounds like bad news.. let her think about kuddly things please

  16. pattisj says:

    Touched by the courthouse steps and her happy place dissolving. That’s bound to trigger an emotional outburst. Love the name Zigzag, too.

  17. It’s a scary place inside Jane’s brain.

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