Posted: August 1, 2013 in dark, fiction, Outdoors
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Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction Friday postings at:


For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, bob with me. I’ll be here all weekend.

Here’s my contribution:

And Then It Rained

Lounging upon a floating donut, Walter basked as the noon sun pinked his body. At the pool’s edge awaited another tall-boy, his fourth. He had two goals: become totally shit-faced and save any critters from his private ocean. With his hands-of-gawd he’d delivered them unto land, Salvation!, then observed. His latest saved, a soaked honey-bee, appeared drowned.

Such a pity.

He pulled from his can oblivious to the drone’s recovery, erratic flight and sudden injection of venom into his cheek.

A clutch seized Walter’s throat.


He sunk into his bobbing tube.

Day to night, night to day, Walter remained.


  1. No good dead goes unpunished. šŸ™‚ (“Fourth”, not “forth” in this case, JK.)


  2. Adam Ickes says:

    If Walter weren’t in a pool we could say he’s sleeping with the fishes, but as it stands he’s just sleeping alone.

  3. Sandra says:

    A swift move from playing the Creator to meeting him. Such is life… Nice one JK. šŸ™‚

  4. Lyn says:

    Never drink and donut at the same time šŸ™‚

  5. vb holmes says:

    Crafty critter that ungrateful bee–if he was in that can when Walter drank from it, he, too, has met his Maker–as he deserves. Good story.

  6. unspywriter says:

    A bee Pyrrhic victory! Loved how you got all that obnoxious personality into a single short paragraph. Well done.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/everything-dies/

  7. rgayer55 says:

    I love Sandra’s comment. It pretty much sums up the entire episode.
    Enjoyable as always, JK.

  8. troy P. says:

    Brutal, blunt, and a fun read!

  9. Well, you win some, you lose some, then you sink. Nice take.

  10. Dear JK,

    What a cheeky way to go. He must’ve been allergic, Thanks for my weekly portion of dark.



  11. Joe Owens says:

    Did not save the bee quick enough to suit, so punishment followed.

  12. Ah! The stings and arrows of outrageous fortune!
    Succinctly narrated and ruthless story — well-paced.

  13. summerstommy2 says:

    It’s all a bit grim if you have ingratitude. Well done sir.

  14. Dear JK,

    Your portrayal of the floating deity being brought low by an ungrateful subject was spot on and probably has happened many times across this pool and beer splattered country of ours. I enjoyed this very much. We used to call bees that had made it way out to our vessels, ‘Sea-bees’. We never tried to save them, though.



  15. Dee says:

    Nice one JK, enjoyed the not-so-dark-you, even though someone still died!!
    Well done

  16. pattisj says:

    He’ll be more than pink when he’s found, I’m afraid. Nicely done.

  17. elmowrites says:

    Poor Walter, trying so hard to help. Sorry I’m late, still getting through last week’s stories…

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