FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~Cometh The Gruff~

Posted: July 10, 2013 in dark, fiction, Holiday
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FFF prompt goats_and_graves_3_randy_mazie

Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction Friday postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2013/07/10/12-july-2013/  

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come, have a bite to eat.

Here’s my contribution:

Cometh The Gruff

Reap arrived on a cool breeze, accompanied by a looming harvest moon pregnant with Mother Earth’s bounty. As was tradition, the town-folk opened their coffers to celebrate. The folks dressed in their finest; the children wore masks and paint. Music played and rhymes sung, all the while the feast was being prepared in the town square.

There, a pit was dug, and the well-seasoned iron spit erected.

The lottery jar passed from child to child and numbered stones were drawn, each pull rewarded with a treat.

Then his number was drawn and the air suddenly thickened.

Oh, how he hungered.

jKb

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Comments
  1. Dani Karns says:

    Eeeks. Talk about “Games of Hunger!” On Jul 10, 2013 12:27 PM, “The Bradley Chronicles” wrote:

    > ** > JKBradley posted: “Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work > and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash > Fiction Friday postings at: > http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2013/07/10/12-july-2013/ For > those who are new, R”

  2. Carrie says:

    I have a very bad feeling about this…

  3. Linda Vernon says:

    Geez and everything seemed to be going so well . . .

  4. when your number’s up its up
    very delightful tale

  5. Dee says:

    Oh dear, not too happy about how this is going to end
    Great bulld up, enjoyed reading
    Dee

  6. Bradbury last week and Shirley Jackson this week? (Or at least a nod in her direction) You have excellent taste (ha!) in influences, darling. And you handle them so well. Your writing gives me chills!

  7. […] up we have “Cometh the Gruff”, a gothic tale in the tradition of Shirley Jackson my one of my new favourites, Mr. […]

  8. Hey, he was just a kid. 🙂 Wonderfully written.

    janet

  9. A great piece of writing. I really liked this. You leave a mystery…hmmmm…….the possibilities.

  10. Dear JK,

    Now that sent a shiver down my spine. Yikes. You have a dark streak and the talent to match.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  11. Oh-oh, time to run for the hills! Tradition turned bad. Nice.

  12. As others noted, a Shirley Jackson feel but a style all its own. Well-done!

  13. Sandra says:

    I could almost hear ‘the air thicken’. The mood change was perfectly executed – well done.

  14. Gabriella says:

    Chilling and well-written piece!

  15. zookyworld says:

    Creepy, dark, well-written — you never disappoint!

  16. Shreyank says:

    oopss… and everything seemed to be going right a while

  17. Hi J.K.,
    Very well written story. Had atmosphere, suspense and a great sense of place. Reminded me on Shirley Jackson’s The Lottery. Ron

  18. I don’t know what to make of it. I’m not used to this serious tone…I thought we were having a goat roast!

  19. unspywriter says:

    Channeling Shirley Jackson? Well done and nicely creepy.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/judas-goats/

  20. rgayer55 says:

    Chilly end to a breezy tale. Well done, as usual.

  21. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear J.K.

    A subtle tale about life and the concentrating power of a sentence of death. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  22. kz says:

    that was creepy. and delicious. 🙂 great story

  23. Sarah Ann says:

    I can’t imagine this is going to end well…

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