FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~Run Rabbit Run~

Posted: November 28, 2012 in dark, fiction, Holiday, Outdoors, writing
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Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction Friday postings at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2012/11/28/30-november-2012/

For those who are new, Rochelle shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers will compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come. Partake of the chase.

Here is my The Long Walk inspired contribution:

Run Rabbit Run

Rapid footfalls, burning lungs and bile-choked throat, the rabbit ran against odds. Any moment, he knew, the muscles of his legs would seize into twisted knots.

Then did.

The Bludgeons were relentless, steady, methodical. More machine than man with fluid filled pistons pumping, gears grinding, iris enhancements straining. Their metallic appendages crushed the lame varmint.

Cheers arose; the thrilled citizens brimming.

The course, the same route as the earlier celebrated holiday parade, was a five mile sprint for survival. Never a hare went unharmed.

Hungry throngs cheered from their secure roof tops vantages as another rabbit unexpectedly entered the field.

jKb



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Comments
  1. yepiratesays says:

    Visited earlier quickly – this is serious stuff here, not for the faint-hearted, and really does crunch – there is a lo here, and it clearly can expand.

  2. Modern riff on gladiators. The terse, incomplete sentences give the perfect effect. I like your choice of names as well–Rabbit and Bludgeons. Excellent.

  3. Sandra says:

    Very grim, very good. Nicely done.

  4. A rather grisly tale, JK. But so very well written I can’t help but “like'” it.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

  5. claireful says:

    I like it from the rabbit’s POV, but Watership Down it isn’t! Great writing.

  6. This is a gruesome story but very creative and original.

  7. Ooh. Having a bad day? Such a gruesome story. But I did enjoy it.

  8. Abraham says:

    I’m not too sure how it relates to the picture, but I like it! As I did The Long Walk.
    (And here I was thinking people would write cheerful Christmas stories)

  9. Mike says:

    Naively done. A grim, chilling take on the prompt.

  10. A wicked act in there…Well delivered too. Nice one.

  11. unspywriter says:

    A rather apt description of holiday shopping–even if that weren’t your intention. šŸ˜‰ Either way, it got the adrenaline pumping.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/tis-the-season/

  12. brudberg says:

    This was another gruesome details. I have a feeling that the typical Friday Fictioneer don’t get a warm fuzzy (!) feeling from Christmas shopping. Loved the gladiator rabbit take.

  13. Shades of the lottery, but much more modern. I so love the way you can chill without serious gore (you can probably do the serious gore, too, but I’m fond of the indication).

  14. Thanks for liking my blog! Good luck with the writing – your descriptions certainly evoke intense mental images and emotion.

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