FLASH FICTION FRIDAY ~Lover’s Knotty Tree~

Posted: August 16, 2012 in dark, fiction, Heart Warming, Outdoors, writing
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Finally finished with my travels (a vacation disguised as a research trip) and I must say, if you haven’t ventured to Maine, do it. Now. And support your local farmers and fishermen, but I digress.

Thank you again to MadisonWoods for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction Friday postings at:

http://madison-woods.com/index-of-stories/081712-2/

For those who are new, MadisonWoods shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers will compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come and play, damnit.

Here is my contribution:

Lover’s Knotty Tree

Seamus gouged letters into the body of the behemoth, his blade old but capable, swiped from the tool shed. Digging, twisting, he outlined with a heart, deepened the grooves, declared his love for Ginny.

He whistled.

He smiled.

He whittled away.

The outstretched arms above shivered as if capturing some invisible breath. Seamus, still working his knife, peered upward.  Leaves spiraled.

Seamus’ world trembled.

The tree groaned, arose, a bleeding heart pulsing on the sleeve of bark. Dirt and rocks flung high, roots poised like octopus tentacles.

A hush.

Seamus stumbled, fell. The giant pounced.

Horrid shrieks echoed through the woodlands.


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Comments
  1. dmmacilroy says:

    JK,

    In the end I think the trees will have the last laugh. Good story for all but Ginny and Seamus.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  2. janet says:

    That’s what happens when you poke an ent…er, a tree. I like where you went with this and the change from light-heartedness to disaster. I thought this was especially good: “The tree groaned, arose, a bleeding heart pulsing on the sleeve of bark. Dirt and rocks flung high, roots poised like octopus tentacles.”

  3. Great Job! I always wondered if a tree knew when you cut into it.
    Scott

  4. boomiebol says:

    Oh oh…poor Seamus. Another briliant take on the prompt JK…mine is here
    http://boomiebol.wordpress.com/2012/08/16/chidinma-friday-fictioneers-817/

  5. I always enjoy your descriptions and the transition from a seemingly innocent moment to one of terrifyingly sinister.

  6. conhippy says:

    Please don’t hurt the trees? Please tell me your imagery and imagination and character creation isn’t dwindled to that?

  7. Danielle Karns says:

    your words never let me down

    Date: Thu, 16 Aug 2012 12:24:21 +0000 To: dmkarns@hotmail.com

  8. Why should trees just sit there and take it? I love the possibility of retaliation, nicely worked out.
    cheers, Lorelei

  9. finally the trees have their revenge

  10. Sandra says:

    Very very graphic! I could see this scene so well. Well done.

  11. vbholmes says:

    Great imagery–Pixar could not have done a better job .

  12. Jan Brown says:

    Oh, good story! Nature always wins in the end. Ginny will have to find a more environmentally aware boyfriend 😉

  13. rochellewisoff says:

    Wow. Now that’s not something you’d expect when declaring your love in tree bark. Glad your back, JK!
    http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/08/casualty-of-war.html

  14. unspywriter says:

    Ah, Seamus, will you never learn? And a right normal reaction for the tree, abused so. Nice spine-tingly way to start the morning.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/thus-endeth-the-lesson/

  15. billgncs says:

    I don’t know what you call it, but I really enjoyed the flow of this one.

  16. keliwright says:

    I can’t tell you how many images and scenarios went through my head while reading this. The story seemed to change with every sentence. (Not sure if that’s a good thing or a bad thing.) I could sense something beneath the surface from the beginning. I thought it was a twist in Seamus’ psyche, not tree roots (or giant feet). Very visceral, and I expect to see viscera draped everywhere at the end there.

  17. erinleary says:

    It’s the Wizard of Oz trees in my worst nightmare. Nicely crafted, great tension and suspense.

  18. Joyce says:

    Wow! Who knows what comes rising from out of big, dark roots? An evil brain too. That old tree had a ‘bark’ and ‘bite’ to its bark. LOL Hope you had a good vacation.

  19. Take that Seamus, Hope you’ve learned your lesson and in the future not torture another tree for some dipsy-doodle love of yours. Buy her a bouquet of roses instead. lol. I’m #30 on the list.

  20. elliesy says:

    JK, thanks for visiting my blog. I’ve been reading through yours – great stories – and would like to join FlashFictionFriday. Can anyone play? 🙂 – ellie

  21. Purely.. Kay says:

    I loved this post. This was absolutely wonderful to read

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