FLASH FICTION FRIDAY, an addiction.

Posted: May 30, 2012 in dark, fiction, Outdoors, writing
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Thank you again to MadisonWoods for all her work and organization. You can visit her site and read through the other Flash Fiction Friday postings as http://madisonwoods.wordpress.com/flash-fiction/desolation/

For those who are new, MadisonWoods shares a photo prompt to which several #FridayFictioneers will compose a 100-word flash of fiction. Come and play, won’t you?

Here is my contribution, somewhat early, I know:

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Black Parade

Softly, she leads the procession of shallow depressions across a dusting of white ash on blackest shadowed earth; a torturous path of naked foot falls in her wake, something more akin to tranquil blue lapping at sunned sand.

But not on this barren land.

She guides departed souls, this child, and sings her most sorrowful melody. ‘As I walk through the valley…’ The wind condemns the rape and murder, the lust and greed, their sins committed.

No appeals, no salvation, only this black parade.

She ceases upon a jagged precipice, continuing her tearful mourning.

Descending from grace they begin eternity.

jKb

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Comments
  1. Nifti says:

    And I had to read yours first?! No pressure… Great job!

  2. danielle says:

    glad to hear they are getting their due

  3. rich says:

    they had to get there somehow. thanks for the description.

  4. TheOthers1 says:

    Man, what a picture you created! Dark and mournful. I love the title by the way.

  5. Aah lovely, you weave dark stories so beautifully
    Loved the title

  6. flyoverhere says:

    It imposes emotions of loneliness, depression, sadness, guilt, retribution, misery and hopelessness. There is also a hint of innocence and beauty……nicely written.

    Thanks for visiting my blog and leaving a comment.

  7. Beautifully done. Such a mournful picture you paint with your words. I, like you, was early. Thanks for commenting on mine. http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/05/30/friday-fictioneers-1-june-2012-the-conquerer/

  8. So poignant and very striking imagery. I almost cried.

  9. Dear JK,

    A flight of imagination that took me to the heights and let me fall. Very well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  10. Kwadwo says:

    I wish I could employ words in my writing with such mastery.

    My story can be found here: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/06/01/the-standpoint/

  11. Linda says:

    The prose is evocative of two things, firstly the obvious which is the march of lost souls and secondly it conjured up an image of a progression of lava down the mountain, but that was probably down to the picture prompt. Really well written and I enjoyed it very much.

    Here be mine: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/06/01/friday-fictioneers-too-near-the-sun/

  12. Atiya says:

    Wow just wow. What a visual you’ve created here, full of intense sorrow and loneliness. I’m floored and I really don’t know what else to say. Just wow, it was beautifully done. Here’s my humble share: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/06/friday-flash-fiction-start-day.html

  13. Kaitlin says:

    Wow that last line is just chock full of possibility! Great job! http://kaitlinandmichaelbranch.com/2012/06/01/friday-fictioneers-5/

  14. Kris Kennedy says:

    Wow, I love your writing! Sorrow, intensity, written with a sense of innocence, though. Very cool.

  15. unspywriter says:

    I loved how visual this was and how you used the colors from the photographs. This was very surreal and yet so real at the same time. Very nice.

    Here’s mine: http://unspywriter.wordpress.com/friday-fictioneers/expendable/

  16. dbfurches says:

    A dark take on a serene photograph. Great word images!
    Here’s mine: http://stonesoupnovelist.com/2012/05/31/a-scene-something-on-the-horizon/

  17. ‘Decsending from grace they begin eternity’ You have a beautiful way with words. And this is so evocative. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/06/01/fridayfictioneers-my-pilot/

  18. Brandon Scott says:

    You paint the scene wonderfully. You, sir, have a way with words.

  19. This is chilling! I gather she’s escorting them into hell, or at best into the shadowy Greek afterlife. Is the child a victim of people like the ones she’s leading (which is why she doesn’t have to go down into the valley of despair), or some kind of dreadful inhuman being? A shivery story.

    My try – http://newpillowbook.wordpress.com/2012/06/01/friday-fictioneers-caravan/

  20. Brian Benoit says:

    Great pacing, phrasing and descriptions. “But not on this barren land” made for a great line. Yet another strong short!

    Brian (here’s mine: http://pinionpost.com/2012/06/01/gradens-climb/)

  21. Gray Toast says:

    Dude, I was afraid I was the only one who saw the My Chemical Romance reference. Very dark, and boding. Here’s mine for sharing: http://saberdragon.wordpress.com/2012/05/31/friday-flash-fiction-an-excerpt-from-saber/#comment-239

    • JKBradley says:

      Yes, The Black Parade was completely lifted from My Chemical Romance. As I was writing this “Welcome to the Black Parade” was playing in the background within my head.

  22. Very lovely, and sad. I’m always so inspired by what you catch from the pictures.

  23. Carrie says:

    An Intriguing and mysterious tale I had to read a few times to really immerse myself into its shivery depths. Lovely imagery you have crafted

  24. A very poetic and mournful journey into blackness here. Your word choices draw one in and make them part of this unfortunate procession. Bravo

  25. Dark and filled to the brim with sorrow, with that condemning wind plucking at the hairs on my neck. Very well done!
    Thanks for creating a new word at mine: Disparticulated is wonderful 😉

  26. Mike says:

    A powerful piece of writing.
    So much fine imagery in so few words.
    Thanks for a great read.

    Here’s mine – much more light hearted!
    http://mjshorts.wordpress.com/2012/06/01/missing-treasures-a-100-word-story/

  27. Madison Woods says:

    I loved the mournful last parade of the condemned. Almost like a final group perpwalk, but choreographed to music and imagery instead of reporters and camera flashes.

  28. oldentimes says:

    What a great post! I think thepicture you just made in my head will be there for a long time. Thanks for stopping by mine. Here is my link for others http://oldentimes.wordpress.com/2012/06/01/friday-fictioneers-june-1-apocalypse/

  29. bittercharm says:

    Wow! now that’s a perspective, i totally didn’t expect. so well narrated, its intriguing yet dark, leaving you to wanting more. Loved it. keep penning!

  30. It doesn’t look like there’s much I can add. Powerful imagery of those going to “the other place.” chilling and thought provoking.

  31. Gilly Gee says:

    Superb work, and you found this an easy prompt???

    • JKBradley says:

      Hello, Gilly. Thank you for visiting. I don’t think I found this an easy prompt. This story just began to rattle the cage of my skull, fighting to get out, almost writing itself, as is often the case. I do wonder if my stories are simply dictations, me the scribe. Please come again.

  32. judeayres says:

    The descent into the realm of Hades. An apt gate, the maw of a volcano. Very nicely written. Thanks for visiting me over at:http://judeayres.wordpress.com/2012/06/01/friday-fictioneers/

  33. Jake Kale says:

    Well, if you’re going to hell, you may as well take the direct route. One can only hope they packed factor 5 billion sunblock, otherwise it’s gonna be a very uncomfortable journey. On the plus side, by my calculations it should only take 21 minutes 6 seconds to reach the Earths core, so at least it wont be a long one.

  34. rgayer55 says:

    Very poetic. The flow was smooth and graceful. I really loved the last line.

    Thanks for reading & commenting on mine.

  35. Very intriguing imagery and language. Loved “something more akin to tranquil blue lapping at sunned sand”!

  36. This gave me a dark & wispy feel, love it! I also like the title very much…Nice job!

  37. Simply poetic. Beautiful use of imagery and language.

  38. EmmaMc says:

    Wow, a very powerful mix of innocence and darkness. Just reads beautifully, feels a little apocalyptic.

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